blog #7

Compared to my first blog in a way I do believe that I am progressing. At first I did not know what to say or do, but now I have so much to say that I have to check myself. On the other hand, I do not think that I am progressing because I am starting to get lazy. For example, some of my blogs are being turned in late. The only thing that I believe is helping me out as a writer is the peer reviews. They really do a great job critiquing my paper, to me. I would not change anything in this class, because I am learning so much in this class. My learning process has changed, to me. Compared to the beginning of the class I was like more to myself did not want anyone touching or reading my paper, becuase I was afriad of what they would think of my paper. Now I do not care I want them to read my paper so they can tell me what I went wrong. Yes, I do beileve my writing improved, because now I am more into details and I understand where I always go wrong with my writing.

My Ad Please!!!!!!!!

                Gun-free South Africa Advertisement

 It is a lot easier to get a gun in South Africa than at any place. They are showing a picture of a young man buying a gun out of a vending machine, like it is candy or something. The audience is anyone with common sense to know that this is an outrage. This is a genre of violence how can you have so many gun in a vending machine? If you look carefully it states that "your donation will go to the Gun Control Alliance, for a gun-free South Africa". Basically if you destroy your country with guns it is ok because you are helping South Africa Gun Control Alliance. This is not what I would expect from anyone. I am pretty sure that the audience for this ad would not had expected this either. This is like giving a hand gun to baby. I believe the author of this ad chose gun violence as the tone, so people around the world can be aware of how easy it is to get a hand gun in South Africa, so they can help control it.

I want you to describe all of the following:

My final paper does not look that much different from my rough draft. I just fixed a few errors. I did not make major improvements on my final paper, because I did not feel like I needed to. I have more that enough details and my paper is pretty long, well at least it fits the requirements. Yes, I tend to be overly wordy and have a plethora of run-on sentences. I edit my paper beause of my peer review. They saw my errors and corrected them. I think my strongest aspect of my paper is the details. I feel like I really get carry away when it comes to details, because I would like to think that I am a detail person. My weakest aspect of my paper is probably the run-on sentences and/or comma splices.